Reviews for "Just Until Sun-Up"

Your description of the fiery horses galloping across the field is excellent. The piece is descriptive and well written. I would have liked to read more about what the two characters looked like. It was easy to picture the events and their surroundings, but somewhat difficult to form a picture of the two girls.
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This is well written - I can tell it has either been meticulously edited and worked on, or it is a very good early draft.

You have a good sense of 'movement' in the story. Things flow along without stalling or stumbling over frivolous words.

Is this a short story? I didn't notice it saying so on the description. If it is, there is a good basis here for something longer. Bravo on a brief work of very high quality.
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What a wonderful opening chapters, I like your style and pace and I am eager to read more of the story. I like both your characters, they are warm and very real and the story is easy to follow, it is refreshing.
I cannot write anything bad about it, only to keep on repeating myself over and over again how much.
I do hope you get it into print very soon. I will definitely buy it not just for myself but also for my grandchildren too.
I wish I could write as well as you, I envy you your skill.
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I warmed to you as soon as I read that you had a story published in one of the late, lamented MZB's anthologies. I had a story published in her "Fantasy" magazine and had the delightful opportunity to speak with her in person.
This is a lovely, fun, all too short read. I love that you immerse us right in the middle of the story but I'd have liked to have seen some exchange with the robbers.
Also, what do our two women look ike? Ages? These are quibbles though.
Your writing is strong and assurred and I gave you high marks. Good luck with this.
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This was a well written unusual story. I found the names rather hard to remember but you still managed to bring their characters nicely to life. It would be interesting to read on further to see what the witch is all about.Really enjoyed the way the horses reappeared. Great. I presume this is just a short excerpt from a novel? If so I think the rest will be an enjoyable read. Not too sure what age group it was for but I feel that the teen market would enjoy it. Good, intersting start to a story. well done!

Reviews for "The Sun God's Reading"

I found this piece charming original and well structured.I don't ususally go for writing in the first person but this is truly an exception.It had that quirky childlike Harper Lee about it.The writer also has a light touch with prose that allows the piece to skip along and sparkle.Congratulation all round.
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So not much has changed. Apollo may have become rather more sophisticted than the good old days of Arachne and Marsyas but he's still the same old bastard.
I thought this worked on all sorts of levels. Ths casual school setting and the throw-away references to gods. The bickering and ambition. The whole theme of creative naivity. The difference and tension between creation and performance. I loved it. The only question is- why might it be a problem getting a few words with Apollo? Presumably he was just another member of staff.
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An original and fascinating story, although a little confusing as to time and setting. I liked the idea that the narrator was the accidental beneficiary of the special encounter with Apollo. 'When the Gods wish to punish us - they answer our prayers.' In this instance 'punish' is too strong a word - but the drift (as I see it ) is there.
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This is a well-written parable/allegory, which is just the right length.
We are free to put our own interpretation on it and to find the answers to our own questions - always a sound plan, in my view, where short stories are concerned. In a novel we need a little more guidance.
You refer to ‘the relevant word Us’, but I can’t find it. I won’t take you to task for ‘practicing’, because I am (slowly) coming to terms with American English!
Thank you for a stimulating read.
Good luck & best wishes.
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I liked this a lot. Very good flow and easy to understand. The only thing I didn't catch was the name of the narrator and if it was a male or female. I would have liked to know more about the narrator. Other than that, I think the story was fun! Good job!